Credit: John Nixon

Credit: John Nixon

Sitting in the tree next to her brother, Sheba giggled.

“Be quiet.  Those people will know we’re watching them explore the gnarled wood,” warned Jacko.

“The crooked trees and those funny people in their short pants make me laugh,” whispered Sheba.

“We can’t ever let them find us.”


“Pa says if the people find our village, our way of life will change.”

Always curious, Sheba didn’t understand but followed the rules.  “Someday I’ll explore and see where the funny people go,” promised Sheba.

Exasperated, Jacko shook his head but the dreamy look on his sisters face worried him.


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18 responses

  1. Sandra says:

    Enjoyed this – well done.


  2. Youthful rebellion in a very different setting. Good job.



  3. Linda Vernon says:

    Very interesting and nicely done!


  4. Really tells more than this simple story.. what’s normal.. what’s not.. all a matter of perspective.. maybe it would be better to live in a tree.


  5. Oh yes…she will go. He might as well just let her.


  6. Dear Maryann,

    I think the girl’s gonna do what the girl’s gonna do. Nice one.




  7. What a wonderful depiction of the free-willed curiosity of a child. I can’t even imagine all the adventures that Sheba might find! An absolutely delightful piece!


  8. Nan Falkner says:

    I wonder why they have to keep hidden. I really loved your story – Thanks Nan 🙂


    • Thanks. Not that I have plans to continuing, I was portraying them as being from a closed society such as the people in the movie The Village. Modern society didn’t know about them and these kids didn’t understand the modern ways


  9. A lovely story with darker undercurrents of fear, prejudice etc.
    An enjoyable read 🙂


  10. I can understand his concerns. But they will go and things will change. The way it is.